Saturday

Window Girl - a piece of my writing

I sat by the window - the same place I've been for the last 9 months. Like always, my mum, therapist and nurse are crowding around me, trying to get me to move, away from the window. It has been nearly a year since my dad left. I can remember the day like it was yesterday.

He had come back from the pub in a state, the strong smell of ale wafted everywhere. My mum started screaming things at my dad, and he hit her. And suddenly the door slammed shut; he hasn't come back since.

But I know he'll come back one day, I just know it! And whatever my therapist tries to convince me, I know that he isn't gone for good.

We had such a bond, when he wasn't drinking that is! We did everything together: we went swimming, visited cafes, went to the fairground together, and its all my mum's fault that he's gone... If she didn't shout back, he'd still be here now, and we'd be baking gingerbread together, or going go-karting, or kayaking. Together...

He has to come back though. And I know that one day his big black Volvo will coming roaring into the drive, and I'll run into his arms and have a long hug. Then we'll go rock-climbing and we'll catch up!

But until then, I'm just a Window Girl, sitting on the window sill, waiting and waiting. And waiting...




I've written this, and haven't read it back, so it meant not make the slightest sense! I hoped you liked it, and let me know whether you'd like to see more of my writing! Also, please give me any praise/constructive criticism!


© 2015 Lexie W
Do NOT steal without written permission from me.

20 comments:

  1. Its really good! i think you have the makings of a great writer! I would love you to do another post just like it!!!

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    1. Thank you so much! I will probably do some more posts, so keep an eye out!

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  2. What a wonderful piece of writing! You're an amazing writer and I would love to read more of your work ♥
    Amy xx

    Little Moon Dragon

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    1. Thank you so much! I will definitely post more writing! <3

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  3. This is brilliant! And I don't see any mistakes, which is a good sign! You should continue on with this as a short story with several chapters. :D

    xoxo Morning

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    1. Thank you so so much (I LOVE your writing)! Maybe I will continue! <3

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  4. I really liked it except for the fact that it was really sad ; (
    Abi

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  5. Wonderful piece of writing! You are a great writer. Yes, please continue, I really look forward to the rest of the story! : )

    ~ Sarah : )
    * The Joys Of Life *

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    1. Thank you! And keep your eye out, as I will almost certainly write more!

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  6. A lovely story Lexie! You're a very talented writer. I don't think there's any critiques to give you!

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    1. Why thank you (P.S. I know who you are! #andiamnotastalker :D)

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  8. I love this piece of writing! I'd love to read more!
    -Jollygirl
    http://reflectionsofajollygirl.blogspot.com

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  9. Incredible piece. :) I shuddered at the hope she felt that her father would come back, because he probably won't (at least, that's what I thought). Well done!

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